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Submitted by calliope on 1 February 2008 - 11:48pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
Death comes in the night
A silent figure in the gloom
Awaiting that fateful moment
Of life’s immenent doom
Your spirit will leave your body
Your appointed time is up
You’ve committed your atrocious sins
You’ve overflowed your cup
For you death will be frightfull
To the Depths with your cold heart
Your journey doesn’t end there
For you it’s just the start.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
(3 votes)
When Death Comes
I read this three timess and enjoyed each read, nicely done my Favorite:Your journey doesn’t end there For you it’s just the start.
I believe in justice and revenge
Movies where the villain who has tortured and tormented people often die a quick death, pisses me off.
But I have no belief karma or the afterlife will do it. I wish a living misery of pain on perpetrators.
Forgiveness is for our own salvation, not theirs.
cheers,
Jess
well done
Rhyming is quite good, this line is excellent
“you’ve overflowed your cup”
You said so much in so few words
nice writing
Chrys
Thanks everyone...
…for your wonderful comments.And I do believe you get your just rewards,if not in this life,then in the next
Lacy,
Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.