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Submitted by poewriter58 on 29 January 2008 - 2:57pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
Talk me into the wee hours of morning
Quiet the fears of lost love longing
Hold me captive with words so dear
Speak then softly so that only I may hear
Write them in a verse that is you
Help me end these waves of blue
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
(1 vote)
I have read a couple
of your poems now; they’re gentle and lovely. Moderate, constructive thought: Your poems would be even more effective and evocative if you created a slightly better rhythm and scansion.
I look forward to reading more of your work! Very nice!
Reverend Bec Hudson
Shine Your Light
It’s the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!
thank you
Thank you very much for your kind words and I will keep your suggestion in mind as well
Chrys
Waves Of Blue
I loved this sweet and simple and powerful!