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freeform

Not asking for a lifetime , only for one night

Searching for the right chords

That would make this song turn right

 

Not for a lifetime, but for a day

I’ll never ask if I should stay

Not for a lifetime, but for a day

That’s all I’ll ask

Then be on my way

 

From Main street to Montgomery

Listen to the motors roar

To tempt a sleeping heart to wake

I’d beat a footpath to your door

 

Talk with me awhile, see what time will bring

Not asking for a lifetime

Not asking for a ring

 

Walk with me awhile

Through a land of what might be

Not asking for a lifetime

Just have this need to be

 

And I’ll just go on believing

That one day I’ll find the key

That unlocks a hidden heart

That is longing to be free

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Please do not critique mechanics. The inconsistencies in style are intentional, or correcting them is not important to me.
These are original lyrics still working on the music
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Submitted by RSScheerer on 27 January 2008 - 2:07am.
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Musical

Even without hearing the notes I know that this is a beautiful song. The words themselves are music.

~ Ronda

Submitted by poewriter58 on 27 January 2008 - 2:39am.
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Musical

Thank you Ronda. Now that my arm and hand are out of the cast and on the mend I can work the music into this one