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Submitted by whitetea on 7 January 2008 - 4:22am.| Updated 7 January 2008 - 3:22am.
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So many ways
to watch them
The pages,
the ones that come in front
so that the fires
get colored
ink
reminding me all of the world
is still there
there are tvs
lined up in restaurants
newsflash after commericals
after countless interruptions,
of what we are.
of that growing.
and me left with no
way to speak back
to leave a hello
between now
and the next blast
of schrapnel that is more flesh
than car,
of scraps and cloth
and voices who are always
ready.
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
(2 votes)
Just curious
Curious to know if you have been over there?
I wish I could say that I
I wish I could say that I had traveled out that far, but no. Someday, maybe when its safer.
Both your strong ...
writer’s bent—and your artistic sensitivities—fly right. Your a cappella peals. Well done and with a perfect (either that, or near-perfect) pitch. I appreciate your spareness. Don’t need background music. It’s just fine without it.
Too many words provide redundance. You don’t. A good thing. The spareness makes reading your works more worthwhile than otherwise.
A pleasure.
Yours,
Chuck