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Barbara Writes

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Submitted by Barbara Writes on 2 January 2008 - 12:26am.| Updated 30 September 2008 - 8:25am.
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Healing is lost to the girl
who has no hearer
she scurry to hide the cries
no one is  listening to

Her  heart ripped apart
can’t be repaired
as her love is no more
her life blood cease to flow

A massive heart attack
her love is whack
No mending for the misery
of sudden affliction

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Average: 4.3 (3 votes)
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Submitted by purplemoondoll on 2 January 2008 - 10:16am.
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Very sad

You illustrated the story well in some short well executed lines.

Kaz

It’s impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Submitted by Barbara Writes on 4 January 2008 - 11:36pm.
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Thanks

I really appreciate all the comemts

Submitted by mark on 4 January 2008 - 7:42am.
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Hi Barbara Welcome To Our Community

I am curious to know if this is about you? Are you writing in the second person here?
I will be back,
Mark

Submitted by Barbara Writes on 4 January 2008 - 11:34pm.
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Thanks

It was about me

Submitted by amilu on 4 January 2008 - 9:10am.

barbara, I really like the

barbara,

I really like the title of this poem….it makes me feel like as if you r watching a reflection of yrslf in the mirror and writing abt that reflection!

Submitted by Barbara Writes on 4 January 2008 - 11:33pm.
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Thanks

Yes that is true

Submitted by mark on 5 January 2008 - 12:56pm.
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yes I felt that and was hoping it was true poetry

Thanks for responding honestly poetess :)
Mark

Submitted by Barbara Writes on 4 January 2008 - 11:32pm.
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Thanks

Thanks, I write a lot about me, and also about everything thing I imagine makes a good poem.

Submitted by mark on 17 April 2008 - 5:56am.
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Your Voice

Rather unique, I likes :)
Mark

Submitted by Barbara Writes on 17 April 2008 - 8:38am.
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Thanks Mark

Smiles:)
Barbara

I didn’t realize I change to my voice even though I heard me taking while rewriting it. When at first it was me looking in the mirror.

If what I said sounds sensible, being aware and not aware.

As usual your comments are aways a joy and appreciated.

Submitted by mark on 17 April 2008 - 12:26pm.
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Not changed, really

Just keeps getting better :)
Mark

Submitted by Barbara Writes on 17 April 2008 - 3:04pm.
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Thanks

Smiles:)
Barbara

Glad to here that.

Submitted by whitetea on 30 September 2008 - 1:59am.
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I admire poetry that gets personal, and especially people that can put their personal experiences forward. I really liked this.

Submitted by Barbara Writes on 30 September 2008 - 7:15am.
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thanks whitetea

Smiles:)
Barbara

appreciate your comment and personal opinion