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Waterdragon

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I am a traveler

In a place beyond time

I speak the language of stone

And adobe,

Listen to the echoes of history

In roofless, melted walls

 

This is my journey

 

I am a traveler,

An earthbound melting misfit

Whispering in the language

Of leaves and lizards,

Of rustling cottonwood leaves,

Taking pictures with my mind

 

This

Is my journey

 

I am a traveler

Just passing through

On my way to somewhere,

Always on my way – on my way to

Else-where, to else-when, to else-wise

Even so, I tarry here

 

This is

My journey

 

I am a traveler,

A stranger from

Time beyond

To long ago

In this ghost-filled home

Of peace and contravening conflict

 

This is my

Journey

 

I am a traveler

Who sits cross-legged on the earth,

Alone with the ancients

Alone amongst shadows and sunshine,

Silence and grace

My heart and soul cry out in echo

 

This is my journey

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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At the 2007 Sunflower Arts & Crafts Festival and Poets Picnic, we did a poetry workshop, where we were given "I am a traveler" and "this is my journey" as the first and last lines of each verse we were to write, and then went to the Quarai Ruins to see what we could write.
Submitted by Meic on 17 December 2007 - 6:31am.
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I really really like this

I really really like this … stanzas 1, 2 and 5 make a truly stunning triplet and could easily stand alone without the other two [not that they’re bad!]. The imagery is superb all through the piece.

Excellent, gets my vote.

Mike

photo: me, late 20s / early 30s - with ‘face furniture version 1’

Submitted by waterdragon on 17 December 2007 - 4:15pm.
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Thank you

so much for your appreciation. This is the last poem in my (now in pre-publication, yay!) upcoming book. It will be accompanied by a photo of the Ruins, too.

And wow, look at you! Gorgeous!

Reverend Bec Hudson

Shine Your Light
It’s the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!

Submitted by Meic on 17 December 2007 - 5:29pm.
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Well congratulations - I’m

Well congratulations - I’m sure your book will be well received.

I’ll continue with snapshots of ‘Mike through the ages’ [believe me I don’t improve!] after the Holiday. In the meantime I’ll put up one or two festive pix as an avatar.

Mike

“Bethlehem” by Meic See more of my art? please visit: http://www.flickr.com/photos/7911705@N07

Submitted by waterdragon on 17 December 2007 - 5:36pm.
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Your work

is just incredibly beautiful! Wow!

Reverend Bec Hudson

Shine Your Light
It’s the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!