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Submitted by theladyblue on 26 November 2007 - 3:04am.| Updated 18 October 2008 - 1:04am.
Style / Type:
freeform
Stunning wings unfold a native wind
As
Desert souls cross fiery paths
Sands of time gather for eternal play
Where
Broken glass falls back to birth
Black pansies wax exquisitely
Watching
Ornate pedals bleed from sugared wounds
The Lady Divine weeps bitterly from her throne
Yet
Beseech her not for death has been her life’s soul pattern
So we play in lucid dreams of our Gods
Forgetting
Unremitting lives just to grasp the moment of this day
And in stroking this page I hope that beauty will oblige
Alas
My pen has found its event
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
(3 votes)
A strangely beautiful yet disturbing poem
Welcome to NeoPoet,
I look forward to reading your other works but won’t get to them all tonight. You posted just a few too many. This is a site where we try to consider each and every poem. Give us a chance to consider each of your works with thought and care.
cheers,
Jess
thank you
thank you so much for the welcome and for your time to review this piece. i realized that i had in fact posted too many by the end of the night haha. i guess working at night makes me a little more than stir crazy lol. again i thank you so much for your time and kindness!!!
<3 Emarie
Oh, I so relate to late night stir craziness!
If you ever get a really harsh review from me, check it against Australian time and you will probably find it was posted after 2am on a Friday or Saturday. Most regulars here have learnt to forgive my occasional excesses, which sometimes include some brutal honesty and at other times are just bloody silly and wrong!
Planning to catch up with the rest of your postings tonight (Tuesday and before 2am 8))
cheers,
Jess
the sad part...i am more sane by night ; P
haha how fortunate for me ; P most of the time i prefer my reviewers to be harsh. if its too sugary it seems fake and then i have to take it with a cat of nines hehe <— was a bad joke…its 4am here btw lol!!!
<3 Emarie