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Submitted by calliope on 31 October 2007 - 3:21pm.| Updated 31 October 2007 - 4:21pm.
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I remember those eyes,
The look of despise,
I remember the pain,
Of the the vicious shame,
That overcame,
My last shreds of blame,
I was tested that night,
And left with the sight,
Of the look in his eyes,
Then the quick disguise,
The feelings supressed,
It became such a mess,
As the chasm deepened,
We were left with our demons,
We both cared,too deeply I think,
Yet,misunderstanding is what made us sink.
We both let our past have a part to play,
We both made wrong choices along the way,
I knew that night was the last it would be,
A feeling I had deep inside me,
So I told you the things I wanted to say,
Yet,I hoped without hope,there’d be one more day.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Please do not critique mechanics. The inconsistencies in style are intentional, or correcting them is not important to me.
(1 vote)

I related,
but this is so personal it could alienate the reader.
cheers,
Jess