A Very Strong Wind
You’re an evil person, a miserable twat.
A silver spoon baby, your mother’s your aunt.
Your dad was an asshole who sold frozen water,
and his fat ugly face was passed on to your daughter.
You attended great schools, but all your diplomas,
couldn’t land you a real man, or disguise your aromas.
He’s a half man at best, and a used part time dad,
your step parenting classes must’ve just been a fad.
I hate how you look, and I hate what you say,
“Ryan would have wanted it this way”.
How would you know, you smelly fucking gash?
The only thing on your mind was saving some cash.
If I had less control, a little more off base,
I would’ve coughed up missile, and spat in your face.
But it wasn’t the time or the place for a fight,
I resent what you said, but I handled it right.
All of your money and all of your cash,
couldn’t afford you a single upgrade in class.
Both the boys hate you, and they always did,
hate you more than you love all the money you’ve hid.
‘Cause you’re an ugly half monkey, with two ugly chimps,
and the milquetoast with the pipe wrench,
He’s the king of the wimps.
I’ve got lots more to say, this was just a small sample,
I’d piss on you if you would come down off your camel.
Wonderful!
*claps* That was amazing! I loved it! I feel very bad for the person to whom this is dedicated. Though, if they are that bad then I suppose I shouldn’t feel bad for her at all, Ne?
I love it. I love the venom. I can almost feel you spitting in her face. Who knew someone who writes so sweetly could write with such hate? What a wonderful surprise!
Surprise!
You never saw this side of me before, have you? Well, just don’t get on my bad side! (lol)
Thanks for your review…Here’s a little quiz for you….I named this “A Very Strong Wind” because it is the definition of her name. Can you figure it out?
Wendy?Gayle?Do I get a prize?If I am right?
No prize
But you got it right…Gail.
do i sense some anger issues
do i sense some anger issues here? LOL
Your words made me hate this woman & I don’e even know her! nice job!!!
donna
I could tell you stories....
that would make your head spin.
I’ll add you to my buddy list, Donna…TOM
A fetid wind bag If ever there was one...
now for sure there are two.
In ink,
Dabbler
ps Hell will hold a BBQ when she arrives.
Good for you
she must be awful. very descriptive!
Thanks Linda
I actually wrote this for the boys….This is therapy.
Tom
WOW TOM!
This was Awesome! I absolutely loved the first and last stanza, the inbetween was damn good too. Does that mean I liked all of it? *G* I think I may know who this is about, but doesn’t matter as I am glad I am not this person! And to think, many say you can’t express yourself in rhyme.. Liars! I give this 5 stars as it deserves it.
Respectfully,
Rett:
“Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!” Rett 2008.
You'll never hear me knock rhyme (unless it's forced)
Maybe that’s why us old timers need to stick together!
Thanks for the kind review, my friend.
Tom
Strong Hatred
I would’ve even do this to my worst enemy. Strong poem that shows some personality and character on your part.
Good poem.
I can get pretty ugly
my friend!! Just cleaning up some of my older stuff, left justifying stuff I had centered which doesn’t work good here, and making a few changes on the way.
Glad you enjoyed.
Tom
I'll be looking forward to your changes.
Hopefully they’ll be even more hateful and cynical.
A Very Strong Wind
Tom, WOW I guess you got that out, because I could feel the anger creeping around on my keyboard! You did a fantastic job expressing yourself here~
Poetry is Therapy
Janice, if you could feel it, then I succeeded.
Like Rett once said.. “Never piss off a poet!”
Thanks for your kind review.
Tom
Damn right!
It is very dangerous to “Piss off a Poet”. You never know how long their reaction will live in printed word! Well done.
Respectfully,
Rett:
“Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!” Rett 2008.
Gail
well versed anger… is it about an ex-wife?
I feel you went over the line when talking about her ugly kids,
although I’ve seen ugly kids I doubt if I’d ever say it to the
parents… sorry .. don’t get mad please… I wouldn’t want one
like this directed at me… other than that I thought it was
damn good… but that is just my feelings on the content.. I see
no-one else has an issue with it..
very good write!
Richard
Good point, Richard
I do agree that kids are off limits, and were this actually being presented to the “TWAT”, that would have been ommitted. This was meant to be over the top and this was nothing more than therapy… Thanks for your comments, (and good sense).
Tom
This was freaking funny as shit!
Such great anger structured in a quite respectful write, my friend.
Oh, if I had this at a prior time in my life, I would not have been at a loss for words when I really needed them.
Spectacular!
Mark
Fucking awesome!
But I am sorry, respectfully, we must reject your application to write Hallmark Cards.
Wish there was more gutsy, honest, raw beautiful poetry like this on the site,
it relates to much more than the person it was directed at, it is real poetry.
all respect,
Jess
I have written poetry like this
Smiles:)
Barbara
I have written poetry like this as therapy, but not brave to post as mine is mixed with vivid violent descriptions, I would never do.
THAT WAS AMAZING FROM START
THAT WAS AMAZING FROM START TO END IT WAS A RIDE, WITHOUT THESE ARMS OF MY CHAIR I’LD BE ON THE FLOOR BY NOW. THANK YOU, WOW AMAZING.
I am afraid of this type of reless for myself for I might keep
Writing until I dropped dead of writing once I got started I might not be able to stop but I do enjoy seeing some who deserves it get it and from the feelings that come off the page and land in my lap I just got to say Am glad they don’t stick to me Nice write Donnie /Sinbad and if the kids turn out like her go ahead and testify to the fact ugly is as ugly does. Life is like a box on fire on your front porch do you kick it or do you stomp on it? hehe
hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha
LOL…rolling here @_@_@_@_@_@_@_@_@ kk I think I’m better now…the only thing I have to say is, from a stepchild’s point of view…yayayayayayayayayayayayayayaya!!!
<3 Emarie
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“For every shadow, no matter it’s depth, is threatened by the morning’s light…”
From a stepfathers point of view
please read “Flesh & Blood”
and thanks