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Submitted by sumsum22 on 27 October 2007 - 2:48pm.| Updated 27 October 2007 - 3:48pm.
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Clouds obscure it all
Again.
It’s taken too long
It’s all so tiring
A sunset, so Blindingly Simple
peeks over that cloud
waving goodbye to me,
just as you did
yesterday.
-
Clouds obscure you
and that look in your eyes
that I miss so much
it’s just not enough
to know you
as a memory
an afterthought
all those things
were exchanged
between me and
you
(back then)
I had come to know someone new.
it’s you.
it’s you.
And I wish for it
And I long
for your smile
once more.
Clouds obscure it all-
all of it.
I wish no more.
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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You do loss well
The clouds are a very effective metaphor.
cheers,
Jess