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Submitted by calliope on 24 October 2007 - 5:13pm.| Updated 17 December 2007 - 3:14pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
Everlasting life,
Neverending strife,
Bestowed with just a kiss,
A life prolonged,
A woeful song,
Escaped through parted lips,
O’ what once was,
This immortal buzz,
In death,would not be missed,
In the court of lies,
So long despised,
I hear a menacing hiss,
That those I hold dear,
Shall live in fear,
If I only had one wish,
But as my lovers breath,
Blows out with her death,
This curse, I bestow with a kiss.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
sorry to those who have read these poems already just revising a little.
(3 votes)
you
you have a fetish with rhyme
I can see already,
the way your poe - try flows.
It dips and dives,
climbs back the hill.
From that point on
who knows?
Mark W.
I have a few...
…Poems that don’t rhyme if that is what you like ,not many mind you,but a few if you haven’t already read them.One is Clarity,Another is Thy Will be Done.Read them Please I’d like to know what you think for all your comments mean so much to me.
Lacy,
Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
Misery indeed
Your immortal dance with death fits this peice well. It shows a hint of romance in a familiar style of simple rhyme. I did enjoy it, thank you.
Whether a poem uses rhyme or
Whether a poem uses rhyme or not is entirely in the hands of the poet. Providing the rhyme supports the overall rhythm [and doesn’t detract from the meaning] it can add to the poem - as it does here.
Mike
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