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Submitted by calliope on 21 October 2007 - 4:14pm.| Updated 16 March 2008 - 9:53pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
A girl sits on the shores of memory,
And watches the past fly by,
Caught up in the midst of a revery,
She doesn’t notice the present cry,
A cool breeze blows on the golden shore,
As she knowingly opens a once locked door,
Where past ,present ,and future is swept,
Into the current where memory slept,
With her eyes open wide,
She dives right in,
And drowns in the tide,
Of Remember When.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Please do not critique mechanics. The inconsistencies in style are intentional, or correcting them is not important to me.
(2 votes)

A not too distant present
well done Lacy.Great use of time.
In ink,
Dabbler
Well done. I love the
Well done. I love the ending. It really drives home the message.
Marc