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Submitted by calliope on 11 October 2007 - 1:11pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
Gently swaying in the breeze,
The green and orange and golden leaves,
They look so tranquil, so at ease,
No nervous energy within those trees,
No broken hearts,never teased,
No tears, no fears ,no hidden fees,
By emotions, they’re never seized,
Just Mother Nature and those windblown leaves.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This is well done.
effective allegory and 8 consecutive rhymes and the one repetition worked.
Just wish you hadn’t used “Mother Nature” cliche.
cheers,
Jess