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JT Vash

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Londonderry, NH,
United States

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Style / Type: 
freeform

I would Finish any flagon

I would drain most any draught

If its contents made it easier
 
but sadly they do not

I would mix up any tonic

I would drink up any brew

I would take all pills or potions

So that I may be cured of you

You are poison deep inside me

coarsing slowly through my heart

you are sickness, you are virus
 
you have torn my soul apart.

So a poison for a poison

Drink it down and drink it quick

let them battle deep inside me

let them punch, and let them kick

As my body is the battleground

the dirt and blood will blend

cries of fury, and of sadness

clash together, in my end.

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Please do not critique mechanics. The inconsistencies in style are intentional, or correcting them is not important to me.
Let me know if this creates a picture in your mind. Imagery is important to me.
Submitted by china blue on 28 February 2010 - 12:40pm.
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JT

4

Pefect rhyme and rythmn in this write. You have a lot of potential young man.
Chrys

Submitted by Mand on 3 June 2010 - 12:52pm.
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I agree with Chrys.Love Mand

5

I agree with Chrys.

Love Mand xxx

Submitted by Candlewitch on 3 June 2010 - 1:06pm.
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Hello

5

Nice to meet you. The imagery
is wonderful and dark. I think
this poem deserves five stars
and a spotlight nomination!

Always, Cat

Submitted by JT Vash on 4 June 2010 - 11:55am.
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Thank you! I think this one

Thank you! I think this one is my favorite, and I too hope it gets spotlight!