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Submitted by Barbara Writes on 25 December 2009 - 11:23pm.| Updated 27 December 2009 - 8:42am.
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She’s Gone
She walked alone
Darkness
By Night
Darkness
By Day
Love broken
Pain
Tears
Heart
Sleep
Eternal
He walked alone
Darkness
By Night
Darkness
By Day
Remembering
By Day
The Times
Togetherness
No more
Truth of love
Removed
Stand
Alone
Special place
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Dearest Barbara
THIS is my new favourite of yours wonderful write my friend
only have one suggestion but its just that, take want you need and throw what you dont find relevent
Love once true
Remove [removed]
Standing [to stand]
Alone
Once Special
hope you are having a wonderful xmas day … with all my love Jayne x x
Jayne
Thanks for the suggestion. I totally agree. I had it that way but somehow change it in the revision. I am working on a new style of writing. This is the first of many I will write before I get the form I am striving for down.
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
Barbara … since I have
Barbara … since I have been here I have seen your writing go forward in leaps and bounds … I am eagerly watching to see which way you go, you were one of the first people i read here …
love Jayne x x
Jayne
Thanks I really appreciate that you take interest in my writing. I am about to embark on a new style of writing. I first must learn it. This poem is a start of another leap.
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
Profundity
Thanks, I like your suggestion. I wanna think on it a bit to see how truth of love flow in my mind.
It take a little time for things to sink into my poetic eye. I took the cliche out while I meditate on this great line.
I have learned the meaning of lots of words from you since coming here. Mostly because you use them to describe me. *S*
profundity– I like. It is interesting you use this word because I just tonight learn what it means to write poetry using single words to describe an event, something, or someone while trying to understand postmodern writing.
This is my first attempt though it may not be postmodern.
I took something simple as two people separated and make it more dramatic by letting her die. Then allow him to realize after her death that she was his true love or the truth of love.
Glad it turned out okay.
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
Thanks for the great
You reading me as a poet rather than a student makes me overwhelmingly grateful. I remember you saying I provoke you with my bad grammar *S*. My grammar is getting easier to remember now. I couldn’t have ask for a better mentor.
I will read more of Eco and Walter Anderson. I may not be your protege any more but I’m still learning
– verbose and obscure still broading my vocabulary.
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
Dear Barbara
A charmingly concise little tale, so complete.
This is good Barbara, I specially liked the way
you made the days repeat themselves giving
the feeling of time going by.
Love Ann of Norway.
feeling of time going by
that is exactly what i wanted to do thanks for noticing that.
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
your words
Stark and harsh, just as a break-up is. Brutal! one person freeing themselves and another left wrecked. It got to me!
Chris
Thanks for reading and commenting.
I wanted to show strong emotions with the least amount of words. Thanks for sharing thoughts.
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
Poetry/ prose
Hi barbera, i like d this, well written, also read well.
I;m afraid that’s life, it happens and we just have to get on with it.
Lol xx
bowmore bill
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Poetry/prose–i am happy you noticed it because I want to familiarize myself with prose. I guess my interest in prose has crept into this poem. A good thing.
Yes life, getting on with it is the best way to heal I suppose.
lol xx
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
Hi Barbara
A lovely poem from the heart.
Excellent, you have been busy dear, and I will be glad to finally catch up on some of your work.
Love to you and yours.
Lyz.
XX
Lyz
Thanks, I’m looking forward to you reading them. I am on school break now so I have more time to participate.
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara
i really love this one. i
i really love this one. i love the second paragraph. this is my new favorite poem on the site
childof21
This is my new favorite poem on the site. Thanks for saying that you are the sweetest.
Life goes on and we keep living
~~~~~~~~~
Be whoever you are
At all times, and
Remember that
Because of this, people will
Always
Respect, and
Admire you
©2008Leonard
Respectfully
Yours,
Barbara