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Docmaverick

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Western Classic

Soon the day will come

when we will harness the wind,

and teach it not to destroy

but to become our friend.

Soon the day will come

where we’ll be able to lasso space,

and we will go anywhere

because everywhere will be our place.

Soon the day will come

when we will capture and disperse peace,

where wars and the absence of hope

will forever have to cease.

Soon the day will come

when love will have it’s way,

and we’ll all live in harmony

forever and a day.

Soon the day will come

where all these things are true,

but to get these things to happen

it all starts with you.

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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