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Submitted by docmaverick on 5 September 2007 - 7:23am.
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Can you help the children
or the homeless on the street?
Help with a couple of dollars
to get something to eat?
Or are you too judgemental
and could care less for their plight?
You act like you don’t see them
and dodge ‘em with all your might.
But if you took a moment
and listened to a need,
you might just give someone hope
or at least help plant a seed;
After all they are our fellows
they’re people we ignore,
we’re in a rush and will not help them
as we fumble for the door.
So take a step to help somone
an act of kindness will quite do,
for the next time ther is trouble
the recipient might be you.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
What did you think of my title?
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love the poem, it says alot
love the poem, it says alot and i agree with you, however I got a little caught up on the rhythm but all in all its a good poem
To True........
Hi Doc
Again a brilliantly written, thought provoking piece. You put into words thoughts that do not occur to us, qustions that we do not often ask.
“So take a step to help somone
an act of kindness will quite do,
for the next time ther is trouble
the recipient might be you.”
One never knows whether ones riches or good fortune will last forever does one and that line really puts it into perspective for me. Thank you very much for this write, its a very good one!!!!
Kind regards
Feebie
Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)