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Docmaverick

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Western Classic

To share the rythm of two heartbeats

or the secret of a smile,

or a wink when words aren’t needed

or a nod, if thar’s your style;

to be alone with just your feelings

to reflect on where you’ve trod,

to feel the grasp of an infant

these are the things of God.

To have the world flood all your senses

or a memory return,

to hear the joy of a giggle

or share a lesson that was learned;

to touch the heart of a stranger

or run barefoot through the sod,

to admit your weakest moments

these are the things of God.

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Submitted by Emmanuel Moore on 4 September 2007 - 6:34pm.

That's well written

In fact so well written, It was like you were
painting a picture.Before you took a swipe at the
canvas you explained what color you were using
and why.A work of art indeed

Submitted by docmaverick on 4 September 2007 - 11:11pm.
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High praise.....

…..indeed. I really appreciate the kind words, Emmanuel. I had just held my grandchild for the first time and was inspired.
Thanks, again,
Doc.