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Docmaverick
United States
Submitted by docmaverick on 4 September 2007 - 5:21pm.| Updated 4 September 2007 - 10:32pm.
Style / Type:
Western Classic
To share the rythm of two heartbeats
or the secret of a smile,
or a wink when words aren’t needed
or a nod, if thar’s your style;
to be alone with just your feelings
to reflect on where you’ve trod,
to feel the grasp of an infant
these are the things of God.
To have the world flood all your senses
or a memory return,
to hear the joy of a giggle
or share a lesson that was learned;
to touch the heart of a stranger
or run barefoot through the sod,
to admit your weakest moments
these are the things of God.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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That's well written
In fact so well written, It was like you were
painting a picture.Before you took a swipe at the
canvas you explained what color you were using
and why.A work of art indeed
High praise.....
…..indeed. I really appreciate the kind words, Emmanuel. I had just held my grandchild for the first time and was inspired.
Thanks, again,
Doc.