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Docmaverick
United States
Submitted by docmaverick on 31 August 2007 - 7:40am.
Style / Type:
Western Classic
You can well affect another
even tough it’s not your goal,
it may happen automatically
caused by the weather of your soul.
Could be the changing tide of your mind
or an arctic wind across your heart,
the aloofness of a rainy spirit
or a calming breeze that didn’t start.
The moody sunset of your demeanor
can change the seasons of another’s soul,
the high tide of your inner being
could cause someone’s thunder to roll.
So do not share your storm fronts
don’t cause a rainy mood to start,
try to share the gentlest of breezes
and the good weather of your heart.
Bad weather days will surface
but they’re yours-and yours alone;
keep those storm clouds to yourself
lest you start a soul cyclone.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
(1 vote)

Again i wonder if you have had some profound
life changing experience recently. Your poetry has changed so much.
And again I suggest being careful of using the second person, “you”
I love the gentle compassionate message of this poem.
cheers,
Jess