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Docmaverick

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Western Classic

You can well affect another

even tough it’s not your goal,

it may happen automatically

caused by the weather of your soul.

Could be the changing tide of your mind

or an arctic wind across your heart,

the aloofness of a rainy spirit

or a calming breeze that didn’t start.

The moody sunset of your demeanor

can change the seasons of another’s soul,

the high tide of your inner being

could cause someone’s thunder to roll.

So do not share your storm fronts

don’t cause a rainy mood to start,

try to share the gentlest of breezes

and the good weather of your heart.

Bad weather days will surface

but they’re yours-and yours alone;

keep those storm clouds to yourself

lest you start a soul cyclone.

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Submitted by weirdelf on 1 September 2007 - 6:24am.
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Again i wonder if you have had some profound

life changing experience recently. Your poetry has changed so much.
And again I suggest being careful of using the second person, “you”
I love the gentle compassionate message of this poem.
cheers,
Jess