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Docmaverick

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Western Classic

Today will be a three ring circus

the performers have yet to arrive,

I’ll do my best to entertain

as long as I’m alive.

 

I’ll jump through the flaming hoops

I’ll do a juggling act,

I’ll even be the ring master

and will introduce each act.

 

I’ll get up there on the tight-wire

I’ll walk from north to south,

in one ring I’ll tame tigers

and put my head in a lion’s mouth.

 

And after selling all the popcorn

and putting on my worker’s cap,

I’ll be following all the elephants

and be cleaning up their crap.

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Written after a hecticly bad day.
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Submitted by weirdelf on 1 September 2007 - 6:32am.
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So cool!

I jump through the hoops for my customers in the bookshop every day, and sometimes have to cop their crap. A perfect workers allegory.
I hope you don’t mind me saying this on the public page but you have expressed doubts to me about your quality as a poet. Fear not. You are a bloody good one.
cheers,
Jess