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Submitted by faerybeki on 2 July 2009 - 5:12pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
S o m e
u n d t
o i i
r n m
s e
s e c s
e l i L
o c r i
g f
t s u j e
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Another little shape poem :)
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Beki,
I love this! I am such a fan of concrete poetry! Sadly, it doesn’t always look the way one wants it to look if it is posted, and getting it to look even remotely the way one wanted it is a challenge in word… I have a friend who did a whole book of these poems, but I cannot remember for the life of me how she made all her ideas work, I only remember that it was much work…
Yours,
~Nina
Thanks Nina x
I’m having more and more of my poems ‘visit’ me in a distinct shape, I’m finding it quite fun, I zoned out playing with the letters and shape of this one, I’m happy you found it effective :) it was most enjoyable to write and ironically it distracted me from thinking how depressing it is to go round in circles and keep relearning lessons lol. Much love Beki xx
Me too. Forgot all about
Me too. Forgot all about them. Will have to see what remains in my tortured files that ended up in the cosmic circular file.
Love it. Beki. And I know it isn’t easy to format.
Hugs,
Anna
“There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic.” Anais Nin
Anna, happy you enjoyed and
Anna, happy you enjoyed and appreciate your presence here, would love to see some of your own concrete poetry (new term for me, i’ve always refered to them as shape poems, constantly learning here at Neo:)). It was fiddly but much fun :) much love and hugs back Beki xx
Beki
Its hard to get it to format right I have been experimenting with one poem for about two months LOL trying to get it to a certain shape, my hats off again for this ones awesome huni .. loved it Jayne x x
Lol keep at it :) x
Thank you Jayne :) It was a fun little piece and expresses where i am at the moment. Hope you’re ok babe and getting what you need :) much love Beki xx
Happy you enjoyed Jess, I
Happy you enjoyed Jess, I played with the poem in Notepad lol but it was elongated in transfer, far more oval than the hexagonal, circle inferring thing it is now lol so I mostly messed about with it directly on posting page, as I’ve said I found it quite meditative. Jay Griffiths sounds very interseting (I perused her website) thanks for the pointer I may investigate further. Thanks for stopping here Jess, much love Beki x
I Like This Too
I like this too, Beki. The shape made the content special.
This reminded me of one of my habits. I keep drawing so many unvisible circles on table, ground, or anything near me, with the tip of my finger,just like the shape in this poem, when I am thinking about something. Enjoyed this circle too.
Sincerely,
Wafi
“Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!” ~Afzal Shauq~
Manena Wafi, much healthier
Manena Wafi, much healthier to draw invisible circles than to smoke cigs(I must give up!) but we all have habits I suppose lol. I’m happy you enjoyed, hoping you’re well Wafi, been meaning to check your latest posts, catch up with you soon, much love Beki xx
You and your shapes Beki lol
To me your circle by moving inwards at the end becomes a spiral so may be i might have had “sometimes life just goes round in circles” around the the circumference and then spiralled down into the centre saying “sometimes it just spirals” …You look oh so comfortable and affectionate with that lucky tree by the way lol. Love K
Me and my shapes Keith :)
Me and my shapes Keith :) lol, happy you found it worth stopping for, interesting idea to enlarge the circle and add new spiralling line inside (because sometimes it does!), will give it some thought. Thanks Keith, much love Beki xx Ps It’s a euclyptus in some gorgeous RHS gardens we visited on holiday, I couldn’t help but think of Anni when I hugged it :) Hope you’re well Keith , must check what you’ve been up to, more love b xx
i like the hexogonal shape
reminds me of honeycomb of the honeybee
whom goes round and round in their dances
and like life
like a metal scooter I found for Ataya
the back tire is flattned on one spot from the brake
probably going downhill so it goes Thump every time
it goes round
i like your poem its refreshing
and fun
Thank you Orgami, happy you
Thank you Orgami, happy you found the poem fun and refreshing, I enjoyed the process of playing with the letters, putting them into this shape (as near round as I could make it) it was, as I’ve said, quite meditative. Thanks again for sharing here O, much love Beki x