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the line
“The day ran to west on rest and” is a gem.
It also makes me feel I am missing a deep allegory,
cheers,
Jess

I think it may be time to repair a common error you make:

The word it’s is a contraction standing for it is. The word its is the possessive—so in the above you would write its home, not it’s home … and that because the its there is the possessive form of the word. (The possessive form of most English words would take the apostrophe s at their ends. The word its, being possessive only without the apostrophe, is an exception to the general. And as I’m sure you already know, English is aswarm with exceptions of all manners and forms.)

I know it can be confusing. Many who hold English as their only language habitually get it wrong. So you are definitely not alone in that regard.

Your it’s time (in the above) is just fine. In that context it’s the proper contraction form standing for it is.

With respect and high regard,
Grandpa

I have been viewing your work for some time and am rerady to comment - hopefully helpful.

You really do not need to enter the title in the poem body area because you already wrote the title and as you can see it is big and bold so what I do when pasting poetry to the poem body page is make sure that there is only the body of the poem in that area. I do like the idea of the heavy lines under the style freeform it might work or you can select blank space from the styles dropdown if you prefer.

I think you want to bring the I and t together in It (the first word)

You might want to remove the second it’s in the 6th line (there are 3 its in that line)

I would remove the a after singing as it is not plural and you connect to a plural (notes)

ahhh is not the English language fun - yes?

I would remove the capitol T in The - make it the

It is all technical kind of things here need a bit of fixing BUT the poetry is really beautiful - I’m glad if I could finaly be of help to you,
Thanks,
Mark