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Docmaverick
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Submitted by docmaverick on 2 August 2007 - 1:23pm.| Updated 2 August 2007 - 2:27pm.
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Tell someone that you love them
tell them how you feel,
share with them the intimacy
that makes your heartbeat real.
Tell someone you’re worried
about how they’re making it,
and that you have concern
for their welfare, a little bit.
Give someone a listen
and hold what they share really near,
let them know that you care
while you’re lending them an ear.
Help someone solve a problem
that might be impeding their way,
you’d be surprised how a shared solution
can brighten someone’s day.
Tell someone that you’ll help them
if there’s anything you can do,
for if we all do this together
then this love poem can come true.
(1 vote)

again, hallmarky
would sound good to an Eagles tune.
Aye, there’s the rub! I suspect you hear music while you write that your reader can’t hear.
Read your work out loud to yourself, without the shifts and changes that lyrics to music allows. Might sound different.
cheers,
Jess