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Submitted by Helene Olivia on 16 March 2009 - 4:37pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
Up the hill from my house I can see a hill free of houses
From the hill top of that top hill I can see my house among houses scattered with trees amongst the hills
From that hill and my house on a hill I can see the sea
Sea held by hills scattered with houses among trees above the sea
From the hill held sea I can see an opening amongst the hills
Hills scattered with trees free of houses opening wide to the open sea
Wide open sea free of trees free of houses free of any hills I can see
Up the hill from my house I can see hills holding houses trees and sea
I have been reading Gertrude Stein the queen of no punctuation and trying out writing in circles
Helene
Well done. I enjoyed reading this piece
Chrys
Hmmm . . .
interesting. I like repetitive forms. I’m not familiar with writing in circles. Is that a particular style? I’d like to learn some more about it. This is a bit too repetitive for me-a little dizzying but I have to give you credit for the obvious work involved! P.S. Great picture!