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SAKKTHEE RAVICHANDRAN
India
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Submitted by SAKKTHEE RAVICH... on 29 July 2007 - 11:13pm.| Updated 30 July 2007 - 9:40am.
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SHOW MY PATH
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Iam totally confused and with tears
cause there is a call from the old hell and
the threat from my new heaven
Where i will have to go? to remain in heaven
or to go to the old and nasty hell
I t is a question screwing my mind.
Though iam solid and strong in state
My mind wavers and keeps me in fear
Though the Lord is so kind enough to me
The order from the hell to strong er than His love
With full of frestations ,I decided to go to hell
to avoid all confussions and worries
Is it correct? show my path . Dear!
SAKTHI RAVICHANDRAN AN INDIAN ENGLISH POET
THIS POEM HAS BEEN WRITTEN IN A DILEMMA
IN THE CIRCUMSTANTIAL PRESSURES
Ravi:
“A question screwing my mind” is great writing. The whole piece suggests great struggle—both in the writing of it and in your challenging dilemma.
Regards,
Grandpa
ANY THING WRONG IN THIS POEM
DEAR GRAND PA
HAVE YOU FEEL AND FOUND ANY INCORRECT APPLICATIONS IN THIS POEM ARE IS IT SEEMS TO BE CHILDISH
NEED YOUR SUGGESTIONS PLEASE
Ravi:
I think the piece as is is consistent with a dithering state of mind, which I think’s appropriate in this case.
Yours,
Grandpa