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Submitted by docmaverick on 26 July 2007 - 1:15pm.| Updated 26 July 2007 - 2:15pm.
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If I could only dance with you
we’d dance both day and night,
if I could soothe your soul
I’d make everything all right.
If I could sing you a song of love
I’d sing it over, and over again,
and if I could capture your heart
I would harness the wind.
If you were cold and needed warmth
I would be your fire,
I would quench your passion
by being your one desire;
and I’d do anything for you,
you are my best friend,
if I could share my love with you,
I’m sure I could harness the wind.
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Love poems are hard. Perhaps the best thing I can say, and I mean it, is I wish I could have written this.
One tiny, tiny suggestion. In the line
“I’d sing it over, and over again,”
for the sake of flow I would lose the first comma. I don’t usually recommend bad punctuation but do you see what I mean?
cheers,
Jess