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Style / Type: 
Western Classic
Maybe its love again!

 

Maybe its love again

Feeble pulses, electric impulses in my brain,

Subtle excitement, rapid advancement, like a train,

Coolness and dampness, droplets of laughter in the rain,
 
Heart-beats are racing, love-birds are kissing; maybe its love again!

 

Church Bells are pealing, the pilgrims are kneeling;
 
praying hard…
 
You are a minstrel roaming the valley;
 
I`m a Bard.
 
The sounds of the Organ, the bulbs filled with Argon; they delight me.
 
Your flowery attire and taste for satire fills me with glee…

 

Run down the mountain, right to the fountain of life.
 
Roll in the green-grass free from the brown dust called Strife,
 
Wave out to the Shepperd, GROWL at the leopard; stay alive!!
 
Ring on your finger,will you in NOVEMBER, be my wife??
 
Wonder what went wrong was it a sad song I sang?
 
Tears in your eyes flowed, crimson your cheeks glowed, my ma`am.
 
Past deeds forgotten, anew bell in autumn you rang!!
 
Hope that this trust grows, hope that your heart knows,
 
……………Maybe its love again!

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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for all you jilted lovers....happy re-union guys n gurls!
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