Standing up sitting down lying flat upon the ground
A grassy knoll or a copper plate
Wired to the switch of fate
Coming in ; faded out ; a loss of focus
Memories being devoured by a sea of locust
Green monsters with an appetite for lovers foolish after-thoughts
Glimpses of the past, pheromones have scarred the heart
Dying scene’s, pictures torn, not wishing to morn
The scorn
Seas of blue, egos bruised
A misty trip into the past
Lovers history
Thirty seconds have passed
Twenty seconds more
Convinced they’ll walk through the door
Into your Field of Dreams
Straight into your loving arms
Five clicks of the second-hand
You are walking in a barren land
One, two, three the skies darken
A single click ; and you’re feeling ill
At last the minute has run it’s course; A single wish set free
Amongst the many flung into the air
You curse them all ; with a lisp; yet only sixty seconds have passed
Until the Abyss
A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man
Sinbad
this is a beautiful piece you have here. It needs a little cleaning up though. A few spelling errors, grammatical errors that when fixed will really polish this up. I am available to help you clean it up if you want, or leave it as is because this is yours and it is good.
Tom
Yes T any Ideas you can share I will consider
Although I my not take them I do apperaite them for I know there are many people who see the writen word in many many differnt ways Thanks again Donnie/Sinbad
I second Tom
Good piece. Well written and a few spelling and grammatical errors. Two that stick out badly are Locoust=locust and feramornoes=Pheromones. I enjoyed the read very much Donnie?. Thank you for a very nice read.
Rett:
“A lie gets halfway around the world before the truth has a chance to get its pants on.” Winston Churchill
I don't no what I do wrong some times the replys don't post
And I forget so easiler to check and see that they do by the time I get back because I try to split my time up Reading and commenting and posting I forgotten what I wrote the first time or if I did but I am sure I did reply to all three of this the other day Donnie/ Sinbad
Wow!
This is my favorite of all your posts.
Thanx,
Chuck
Thanks Chuck
Is kind of diferent from the others Some time I wonder what runs through my mind thanks Donnie
Hi Sinbad...
other than a few spelling errors and a structure clean-up, this
is very good… very good!
glad to see you here and posting…
Richard
Hey Richard Thanks I be very tied up this month
And the highs and lows are mounting still T has giving so insights and I will be corecting and changig this a bitt soon But again I am near out of time and it looks like rain so I be making for home Thanks I never have enough time to read everyone is producing so much and the site has grow so I am try to spread my time around but just not enough Thanks again Donnie
Donnie, this is a fine
Donnie, this is a fine editing job sir. I think the only error I could find was apatite which should be appetite. Other than that you did a gret job. Love the poem!
Respectfully,
Rett:
“On life; Ah such a wondrous thing, beauty and love to behold and experience! On death; I can wait to see…” Rett 2008.
Thanks Rett Tom Has help me too
and if ever i get my computer back I should do better as I have said before unless it is pointed out I would most likely think it to be corect and not fixed it I will change as soon as I can thanks Donnie