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Submitted by GreenBean on 26 June 2008 - 12:28pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
Shallow winds that whispered soft
through vacant woods at dawn.
Noble queens with mates in check
at loss of knights and pawns.
Spent men hand-held mowers pushed
on perfect landscaped lawns.
Time surrendered innocense
when human glory spawned.
through vacant woods at dawn.
Noble queens with mates in check
at loss of knights and pawns.
Spent men hand-held mowers pushed
on perfect landscaped lawns.
Time surrendered innocense
when human glory spawned.
Now, bold men stalk little girls
and tally playground sights.
Imbalanced minds with triggers held
in search of one more fight.
Corrugated myst’ries filed
for when the price is right.
Air and water face-to-face
with twisted winds that bite.
Secrets born in simpler times
exposed with heavy sighs.
Backs are turned as courts adjourn
with prosecuting eyes.
Worlds unknown exploit and trade
their food for parting thighs.
Truth is masked but can be seen
by those who hate the lies.
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I like this
Especially the chess references in the beginning. Nicely put together. Like the title, too, and feel it works with the poem. Welcome to the site, Kim, will need to visit more of your work. :~)
~Jess K.
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~ “Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I’ll have another beer!”
~ “Your inferiority complex is better than mine!”
Thank you for your comment,
Thank you for your comment, Jess. And thanks for the welcome. I’m liking it here so far.
Peace!
~Kim~