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Submitted by whitetea on 12 May 2008 - 2:42am.
Style / Type:
freeform
I have sat at the heel of your life
waiting for the words to come.
i would steal the corners of your wisdom
peering through its occasionally
rosy windows.
you stood against
some ancient mess,
walked lightly. history
coursing through.
the best words (discreet after the years)
I could find for you
are ” something is waking.
don’t stumble”
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
(4 votes)
nice words...
Nice words, memories perspective and the final is beautiful “don’t stumble”
Cheers
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thanks for stopping by!
Hi whitetea...
I love the line..
I would steal the corners of your wisdom..
your poem is good.. but vague.. leaves the reader wanting more.
liked it very much..smiling..
don’t stumble.. yes ..
Richard
Sometimes you read
a poet’s words, and store them in your brain, knowing at some future date they will be perfect to repeat….these of yours….are what I mean…
the best words (discreet after the years)
I could find for you
are ” something is waking.
don’t stumble”
Thanks for posting this.
Pleides
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thankyou pleides i am honored.
Hi whitetea, i like the
Hi whitetea, i like the words, the flow, the imagery of your poem. no stumbling there.. Brava!
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I appreciate that,kailashana.