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Submitted by Pleides on 4 May 2008 - 7:09pm.
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freeform
Curved Space Time…..( A love poem dedicated to J.L.S.)
Gyroscope on board,
Einstein’s theory of gravitation
Describes my love for you.
We are a four dimensional surface.
By assumption, the magnitude
Of our meeting
Is acceleration.
My smaller sphere
Curls around your larger circumference.
The arithmetic rule here
Is Passion.
Components unambiguous.
You are my energy,
My linear momentum,
My validation.
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
(4 votes)
Thank
god i have found a meaningful poem a cubist masterpiece , a symmetrical
equilibrium on loves velocity-why i say this is of recently i have been
subjected to a whole load of garbage on this site, sorry to burden this
with you here- i took a quick look at a poem that said it had adult content-
it didn’t really it was a bit childish and silly something about she liked
to shag her cats or summat like that, i forget now-Also just out of the
air, people may say see you around do you remember this saying it was said a lot at one
time ,to which for some reason may come the reply not if i see you first-Anyway
apart from that i would like to read more of this type of poetry, it is a theorem of
tenderness tantalising-My sincerest Regards
It is hard to type a reply
because I am roaring with laughter at your most wonderful comment…
“i took a quick look at a poem that said it had adult content-
it didn’t really it was a bit childish and silly something about she liked
to shag her cats or summat like that, i forget now”
poets shouldn’t do that to poor innocent cats should they!
Now I’ve settled down a bit, and would like to thank you for reading and the very kind words you have sent my way.
Best wishes
Pleides
Cosmic Love
You have captured the cosmic love we all are drawn to
as if a magnetic pull and yes, we all emit such energy
when in close proximity to the one we adore - whether
it be in dream or reality.
Great job with this poem. Welcome to Neopoets!
Sincerely,
Amara
Thanks for the welcome
and reading my poem and your insightful comments.
Pleides
This is the first relativistic love poem I have read.
I do believe you may have invented a new genre, explored it thoroughly, and shut it down again all in one. It would make Einstein’s head spin!
Bloody well done.
cheers,
Jess
Einstein's spinning head
Thanks for reading, I really like the idea of making Einstein’s head spin! I was reading a book about his life and achievements and this one emerged after finishing it.
Pleides
Spare with words ...
and rich with meaning and imagery. A quite incredible crossover managed from head to heart to flesh (a laudable accomplishment). Or should I say a meld of the three … a blend, mix, fuse.
I’d post more kudos … at risk of redundancy.
Thanx,
Chuck
PS: As to JLS, I’m green with NV.
Love your duck
and thanks for reading and your comments, quite made my day!
Pleides
Hello
Reading through your comments by many people I respect, I know that all I can do is repeat what has already been said, but in different words. Your poem is most refreshing and wonder-filled. Welcome to the site. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Always, Cat
Thanks for the welcome
and taking the time to read and comment, very appreciated.
Pleides
The Mathematics of Love
Really enjoyed the cleverness and expressive tone of your poem Pleides and yes its great to see another approach to love on the site. Perhaps the next one will be about the concept of Phi and beauty? Your Einstein invocation made me recall one of his more humorous exemplifications of relativity:
“When you are courting a nice girl an hour seems like a second. When you sit on a red-hot cinder a second seems like an hour. That’s relativity.”
I add my belated welcome to the site as well even though we have already had some exchanges on England’s dark and Satanic Mills…as opposed to Englands green and pleasant land…Satanic constructions are perhaps somewhat less evident in blighty these days though…unless you see the Gherkin in the City of London that is. lol. Keith
Love for a mathematician
Well, thank you kind sir for reading and your comment and the welcome.
Re another one of mine, you might enjoy my “Einstein’s Mathematician”….it has a New Zealand flavour to it, a touch of “the she’ll be right and #8 wire”. :-)
As for dear oldie blighty…Thomas Hardy’s “Drummer Hodge” sort of expresses my nostalgia for my country of birth, especially the last stanza.
Pleides
ooooh! i love scientific
ooooh! i love scientific jargon-y poems!
It's about looooove really,
underneath all the scientific jargon is this throbbing passionate loooove.
Thanks for reading and your comment…..very BIG smile from me.
Pleiades
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you have shared this with who this was written for right? beautiful